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Untitled 4-9-06 by ~magsteel:iconmagsteel:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


Of all the memories found, ignite
Are fading through this broken light
As all things lost, must so the night
Escape beyond beloved sight

Against such dark elusive plight
Rise up the courage, will to fight
A final stand to stay the blight
Which separates us from what is right
©2006-2010 ~magsteel
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Author's Comments

It's a short poem about nighttime, and overcoming your fear of the dark (which I had as a wee child). It's currently untitled because I can't really find a fitting name for it. Feel free to make a suggestion for the title.

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~Naej Apr 9, 2006, 11:24:58 AM
You probably didn't notice it (I did), but the first line, and the final line, both have 9 syllables. All of the others have 8. Works well with the rhythm, which, in turn, allows for your constant rhyme of "-ight".

Good job; it sounds wonderful, and it describes well enough your point, without just stating it. :D :+fav:

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Actually, roughly 40% of the teenage population has tried pot. So stop trying to be cool, 60%, or I'll fucking eat you.
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~magsteel Apr 11, 2006, 2:53:04 PM
Thanks. I didn't notice that. All I knew is that a couple of the lines had too many syllables. And also thanks on the favorite. Woot!

And to think this whole poem just started out with me thinking what words rhymed with "night"...

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Fuck, I'm thinking too hard. I'm gonna take a nap.
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